Examples:
Cell phones should be allowed in school.
Cell phones shouldn’t be allowed on campus.
Cell phones should be banned from all school campuses.
Correct:
Students should not use cellphone on campus.
Cellphones are allowed in school.
This topic has been an argue for long time ago, and they had accept them, but they should be removed from class.
Cellphones should be allowed in school campus for emergency only.
Cell phones should be on campus.
Cell phones should be allowed to use in school campuses.
Is a good thing because phones aren’t always just used for phone calls but for “sexting.” Which a lot students do it’s a big distraction & bad.
Many schools don’t want students to have phones.
Its not a good idea to not let students have their cell phones on campus.
Cell phones on campus should be allowed but only students should have it only we they have an emergency or may leave school for an emergency.
During our passing periods and lunch is our free time out of class. We should be able to use or cell phones.
Teachers should be allowed student to use cell phone on campus.
Example:
ReplyDeleteoriginal thesis
"Cellphones are allowed in school."
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I am not sure what this author wants to say.
Her thesis should be either for or against students being able
to use cell phones on public school campuses. The thesis says that cell phones are allowed in school, which is inaccurate. Most Schools don't allow cell phone use on campus. The writer needs to think about what they're trying to communicate.
Mr. D.
RUBY:
ReplyDeleteStudent's should not use cellphones on campus.
Student's should not use cellphones on campus.
Cellphones are allowed in school.
Nothing is specific.
Cellphones should be allowed in(on) campus for emergency only.
Is a good thing because phones aren’t always just used for phone calls but for “sexting.” Which a lot students do it’s a big distraction & bad.
There's nothing specific at the beginning of the sentence.
Cellphones should be on campus.
Cellphones should be allowed on school campus.
Many schools don’t want students to have phones.
This will be more likely a TOPIC SENTENCES.
Teachers should be allowed students to use cellphones on campus.
They loss the main idea, and e shouldn't be there.