Period 6 persuasive thesis statements

Directions:

1. Read the example thesis statements

2. Read the thesis statements that need corrections

3. Pick two thesis statements to correct

4. Reply to my post with the original thesis statements and their corrections

*Please explain your thought process for making the corrections.

+10 pts

Examples:

Cell phones should be banned from school campuses.

Cell phones should be allowed at school, but they shouldn’t be used in class.

Cell phone devices should be allowed at school.

Students should be able to use cell phones on campus.

At Gunderson High School, the use of cell phones should be banned.

Gunderson High School should eliminate prohibit the use of cell phones on campus during school hours.

Correct:

Cell phones should be allowed on campus and they are not used during class.

Gunderson should not let their students use their cell phones during school.

Gunderson should keep cell phones.

We should be able to use cell phones during lunch.

We should be able to use cell phones during lunch and passing periods.

Cell phones should not be allowed in school campus.

Cell phones should be allowed on school campus during lunchtime.

Although there is an equal amount of for or against reasons, a good amount including myself would say no to cell phones on school campus.

Yes for emergencies.

Yes so students could call parents after school.

No causes distractions in class.